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I write to a dead general
To ease surviving pain,
A tear falls on the page -
A drop of desert rain
Like balm into the waters
Of life’s too bitter cup,
Tipping the scales of history -
To raise you slowly up.
Above your long-gone victors
Above the scorn of time
Above blind crowds and mockery,
With my ill-written rhyme.
I don’t know if you’ll hear,
But I’m doing what I can
To get this through to you
Past time and wind and sand
May the gods watch you in battle
My dear and long-dead friend
May the desert nights be warmer
And steady be your hands
Meanwhile I’ll watch the picture
Of a kind-eyed weary man
And rue the sorry fact that I
Already know your end.
So, when I was a teenager I had a great admiration for Erwin Rommel - a remarkably sane, human and sometimes right-down noble individual from a time of global madness.
Not to mention the man was a brilliant and charismatic commander even the enemy troops could not help but admire.

(if you'd like some further reading, the  wiki is always a good start)…

This poem is ancient and embarrassing, but i'm fond of it.
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LordAresWar Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I sheded a tear ;-; rip erwin rommel
grind-the-rust Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016   General Artist
Aw, that's sweet. Yeah, he's hard not to like. Definitely was one of my very few heroes when I was a teen. And I still tip my hat to him.
pittbull44 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013
He is one of the very few men (and maybe only) that I can say I respect that was on the nazi side. Mainly because he wasn't one.
Spuggy-Sparrow Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2009
Thus shall the desert fox know what it is to be serenaded and mourned.
KarenGriff Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for write this good poem for the world's best general :hug:
MasterAlighieri Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2008
I also want to send my compliments.

Unfortunately, my thougths on this are exceeding my english language skills and so i will not be able to verbalize all this thoughts. (Sorry :( )
You are an avant-gardist in this sector for i have never seen other works of this tactfulness combined with this issue.
Rommel was a very complex and dualistic character and this is shown perfectly within this work.

Gute Arbeit ;)
grind-the-rust Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2008   General Artist
I'm very flattered that you like this piece, it seems that it's aged relatively well compared to ther poems from that time.
MasterAlighieri Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2008
Yes, I think the poem is a remarkable approach to an issue like that.
And actually thats the sense of poetry.

It's much more exciting than reading the 123.456th poem about the beauty of our environment....
grind-the-rust Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2008   General Artist
It's encouraging that you feel that way about my choice of subject matter - I've been told many a tiem that this is too specific and would appeal to too few people (these same people would defend the million-and-first poem about the beauty of spring springing and the birds singing as having a universal appeal and therefore wonderful, regardless of how bland and non-innovative the approach taken may be)Mind you, if handled in an original or interesting way, nature-poetry can still be done well.
There's some subjects that can be exhausted, or else, simply rendered irrelevant for a time - i don't see the regular urban human being giving any more of a toss about the beauty of the untamed wilderness than about what some sappy teenager thought of Rommel.
Then again, I've written a fair few snippets about the urban environment,and i compulsively write about autumn, so i am kind of guilty of contributing to that vast collection of "setting-poetry"...
this has motivated me to find my other war/politics related poems and see if there's anything else worth throwing up here.
MasterAlighieri Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
I agree. It mostly depends on the way, we approach the subject. And for this reason, poems concerning very "common" topics are also able to astonish me. Its roughly the same in literature. Literature that is still famous despite it's age convinces through its style rather than through the topic (Which is likely to be antiqued after some centuries).
Words are a wonderful way to express one's perception and sometimes we do have urge to do so.
So I can very well comprehend that you are compulsively write about autumn or the urban environment.

If i read good literatue i experience that the characters are not the part of a profound plan. They are rather real characters placed in an artificial environment and it seems as if they are acting on their own thorughout the whole book and it also seems as if the author was not exactly sure about the proceedings. But the work has a momentum that provides it's "rigthtness" .
In this case the topic is not as important as the way, the characters are perceiving it...
And is effect can also be found in poetry i think

Not the topic itself is of the most importance. But the authors perception of it is .

and it is exceptionally interesting if somebody approaches particular topics like the subject of this poem.
Because if somebody does so, he/she has no model of how to deal with it and for that reason it will most certainly be a progressive peace of work.
KyraFritz Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
omg I teared up, Beautiful poem !! ^^ Rommel for ever and ever :heart:
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